Entry - MAG Poetry Prize 2010

5 Year Olds On The Beach

by Shona Hicks

Truck drivers and firemen
with zinc covered noses
Ballerinas' dancing with seaweed roses
Big dreams in hand
in a tiny sea shell
Little hearts believing
till their parents do tell
of the footsteps to follow
much bigger than their own
Put the seashells down, its time to go home
Throw the roses to sea
watch the sand castles fall
When you're older
you may remember to search for them all
Identities crushed
maybe never to return,
replaced by a lesson
they never did learn.

Added: 31.03.2010

Judges' comments on this poem

07.05.2010

I found the punctuation a bit sparse, and should line two have said hoses rather than noses? Nice idea

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