MAG Poetry Competition 2010 – Shortlisted Poem

Siesta

by Sharon Black

Lizards line the lintels;
cats stretch out like pelts
to sip at pockets of shade,
too tired to twitch at passing flies.
 
Your coiled body gilds our bed
as our sweat drifts, pungent, mingling;
my foot in your hand
glistening like clay.
 
The clock’s second hand
trails like a stick along park railings
collecting the minutes and hours;
                                                                                      
spiders slouch in silk cradles
among the whitewashed beams
their bodies fat on flies;
 
through the open window,
the spark of cicadas, legs like tinder,
so dry they could set this afternoon alight.
 
We glitter like a Klimt on these crumpled sheets
your green eyes flickering,
flickering like freshwater pools,
quenching my thirst.

Added: 07.04.2010

Judges' comments on this poem

28.05.2010

Some fantastic imagery. I almost feel like I'm there, inside the poem; reading it is a real experience. Well done!

28.05.2010

Sexy in a good way.

03.06.2010

Like a painting, stong images of colour and shades.

15.06.2010

I love the use of alliteration and the use of rythym, which mirrors the lazy lovers and the creatures around them.

16.06.2010

Wonderfully evocative poem. The heat, the heaviness, the timelessness -

17.06.2010

Great use of similes

20.06.2010

Wonderfully expresses the sensuous lassitude of sated calmn. Great images - 'sip at..shade', 'stretched out..pelts' - every word counts

21.06.2010

Loved much of this. Fab image in stanza 3. Brilliant (and in 5). Great alliteration line 1 and use of sound in whole of stanza 1

22.06.2010

Love the imagery. Words chosen for their sounds but appeal to senses. Perfect vignette.

22.06.2010

1st reading,didn't get/like the poem. 2nd reading fell in love with it. Eventually with each reading it moved to my top 4. wonderful imagery

22.06.2010

Created a hot, steamy midsummer atmosphere

22.06.2010

Brilliant

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