Entry - MAG Poetry Prize 2010

Dragonfly blues

by John Keenan

All, nothing, all, nothing, this dragonfly,
Its hundred, tiny sapphires sparkling in
The bright, June sun, hovers on wings as
Light as breath, criss-crossed with silver filigree,
Then darts into the shade and simply
Disappears: its blue mirrored facets dark,
Its crystal wings and trunk invisible
Like my soul when your love, its sun, won’t shine:
Cold lizard lounging on a rock before
Dawn or glum teenager watching repeats
Of Hollyoaks with all the curtains drawn,
Then you smile and my soul leaps, salmon strong,
Up waterfalls, armour flashing out
Declarations of invincibility and love.
 

Added: 29.04.2010

Judges' comments on this poem

10.05.2010

Lovely use of parallels with nature and teenagers/TV - very effective.

25.05.2010

Really strong and beautiful images throughout but not sure about the last line - could you show this in a less abstract way?

05.06.2010

For me, the last three lines were much more interesting and memorable than the description of the dragonfly. A "salmon strong" soul - great!

07.06.2010

Beautiful.

07.06.2010

Enjoyed this, beautiful poem.

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