Entry - MAG Poetry Prize 2011

Tears in the rain

by Sami Huttunen

I´ve been laying sleepless,
feels like for a hundred years
been fighting the phantoms of the present
been awake trough the dreams of tears
forever meant  you and me
hand in hand in eternity

You were like an angel of the sky
the magic that was your smile
like fireworks in the night
You lighted up my life
there is nothing I can do,I need you here by me
Nothing I  can say,You were the one for me
You opened my eyes ,you made me see
The beauty of life,the way to be

I´ve been wandering sleepless
feels like for a hundred years
been fighting the phantoms of the present
been walking in the rain with tears
forever meant  you and me
hand in hand in eternity

Added: 03.01.2011

Judges' comments on this poem

07.05.2011

Starts quite well - definite poetic 'aura', but 2nd verse a bit 'cliché' & repetition of 1st verse like a song. Revise & it could be good!

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