Entry - MAG Poetry Prize 2011

Boy Remembered

by Andrew Smith

MY Boy smiles at me
A smile of informed majesty
Full of love and mischief too
Of life and reverie
Impish looks of innocence
A paradox in every sense
 
These are the golden years
To cherish and remember
As August turns to September
Like a far away ship
Seen from a sandy shore
Departing to return no more
 
Alas if only time stood still
This moment I could sever
To hold this child within my heart
To last and live forever
But time goes on its endless way
And I thank God for just this day

Added: 14.04.2011

Judges' comments on this poem

04.05.2011

Nice sentiments, but a few too many cliché images. Would be ok as a personal gift to the person concerned.

07.05.2011

Overly sentimental and somewhat trite. Reads like a poem in a Hallmark card.

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