Entry - MAG Poetry Prize 2011

What If

by Mark Richardson

My questions never limit
My whys outlast the days
The scriptures give the answers
To life and how it plays
The mirror never lies
Reflection is our truth
Our deeds will feed our danger
We can’t deny the proof
If serving is the giving
Can wanting ask for more?
Then learning is forgiven
With what we know for sure
This drowning only shows me
That life is but a game
And if we keep believing
All remains the same

Added: 18.04.2011

Judges' comments on this poem

22.05.2011

Impressively effortless rhyming, although there was a certain power which was lacking. Try picking out weak words and phrases to strengthen.

23.05.2011

A little obscure for me.

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