Entry - MAG Poetry Prize 2011

Little lives and disappointments

by Ethan Goldlent

Sipping on your pale brown tea
Watching others attain great heights
Little lives and disappointments…
Crumbling at your core
Life got in the way,
Your little life with let downs
Your heart eroded by regret
When it replaced desire.
Passion muffled by one rejection too many.
 
Your dreams faded
From the reality of work,
Buying milk and getting by.
So now your life;
Your little life
Of responsibilities and restrictions,
All the things you wanted to achieve
Just distant ideas, stirring,
In your pale brown tea…

Added: 27.04.2011

Judges' comments on this poem

04.05.2011

i liked this poem, i think most people say what if.

04.05.2011

Love it. Think second stanza is stronger than the first, but love the idea of seeing things in tea. Maybe responsibilities line too heavy?

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