Poetry Competition 2013 – Portfolio Prize Winner

Work In Progress

by Shelley Nutting

Hastily sketched
limbs of graphite
with staccato step.

Unfinished work
of the unknown artist,

partially blended
portrait of blue.

And if he were
to glimpse me
once more,
 
the creator,
 
would he erase me
there and then
 
tear up the page
and start again?

Or might he spot
potential,
 
something in the way
the light catches
 
the angles of my face
 
that has him reaching
for the pastels,
 
a work in progress
once more.

Added: 29.04.2013

Judges' comments on this poem

06.05.2013

A great topic - we are all in the process of becoming - clear and well written.

06.05.2013

dissimilar to other poems i have picked throughout the process, though i cant put my finger on it, just something i like about it, V good

12.05.2013

Loved the poet's questioning of potential as the object of creation rather than the creator...a refreshing perspective in artistic criticism

14.05.2013

I like this..not exactly sure why but it gets to me...well done indeed

15.05.2013

it's a 'work in progress' alright so well done for the title but it's not finished

15.05.2013

A not completely accepted life, a self examination full with unresolved doubts

15.05.2013

Nice, deceptively simple - the "Unfinished work/... portrait of blue is very elegant."

15.05.2013

Concise use of language, covering its theme neatly without over-indulgence.

17.05.2013

Nice idea, the portrait's voice. Minor point - is the word 'potential' needed? The tentative sketch is reflected in short lines and stanzas, and I like the central position of the creator metaphor.

17.05.2013

'something...catches' won it for me. lovely

17.05.2013

Love the alliteration of ‘s’ and ‘p’ in this. 'Staccato step’ is nicely reflected in the short lines. There’s something about ‘work in progress’ that says this is more than just about the artwork.

18.05.2013

The Artist must see something in us worth progressing.

19.05.2013

My favourite of round two. The structure creates such a driving rhythm offset by a steady pace to the words.

20.05.2013

Nice idea, good use of space but the implications of writing about any 'creator' require more opinion than speculation, I feel. Tricky.

23.05.2013

Memorable

23.05.2013

A promise of hope once again. I like the structure.

24.05.2013

Wow, this is lovely. Absolutely magnificent. It is short, but everything comes across so subtly and powerfully. Nicely done!

26.05.2013

Short and profoundly light. Good job. Peace

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